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[Scoob and Shag: TAS - Going down a shady hallway// Ep: 6]

00:45 Great eye sounds

[Grunt kill furries]

The title is a lie; he decease not them

[Hell is Cold]

I zoned out in the middle of the eye scan God mumbled something about " going down the road will not be smoooode."

[Guilty gear Cisiowianka (water)]

Dont agree, burnout is shit, but funny animation

[Chain]

love that little eye smile

[Tsunami Girl]

Got chiles when the bear floated up

[Agent Scholar-Episode 7: The Story Of Everything (Animatic)]

I like the sound and music mixing
the thunder at 1:35 could probably be a bit louder to give more drama

Generally, the text skips around a lot in speed, making it hard to read, and there is much confusing wording, even if this is a concept video. I, for one, would like to understand what is going on.

04:36 "On the rain again." I think it should be on the street again, maybe in the damp, could ally again. If the rain is the main problem, I suggest " since we didn't want to sleep out in the cold rain again."

14:33 "do you feel" I think it should be, "Yes, I understand how you feel."

06:09 "How my ech of us find a home" Might want to change that to "And that's how we met each other and found a new home"

06:14 "on" shude be in

06:35 "knoking the door" Shude have an on, in between knocking and the

02:11 Is the brand of the Cookies named Cookees? The label makes it look like it's just a misspelt word.

03:39 The label of the cookies changed from Cookees to Cookes

03:47 The white dogs say, "Remember what I just told you" Was it not that dog that was the one that put them in danger, and not the other way around

05:28
Was it not that the problem was that they were dogs and the organisation did not allow dogs in the homes, and not that they needed to keep the two dogs in the same house?

Run the script on grammarly.com and try again. There is potential here, but quality and consistency checking are needed.

z7demexico responds:

Thanks for the feedback
To be fair, I made this storyboard a long time ago and I just made it as a draft on how the show could look like.
Also, keep in mind English isn't my main language so I might made a few translation mistakes.
And the sound mixing is more a mistake about Youtube forcing me to edit the audio due to copyright issues and me lossing the original video.
Never the less, thanks for the advice and I promise to improve my material.

[McShooty Animation]

The animation is lively, but the camera work might be a bit too sporadic; from 00:14 to 00:20, the screaming dudes' shoulders are missing lines, and you might have wanted to at least animate the other person's eyes a bit in this situation if you want to give it a bit more life

Love the thank you in the end.

SeasonGrounds responds:

the missing lines on all characters' shoulders are intentional. There's also a bit of animation that got lost in this version compared to the YouTube one.

[LoL | Yone Vs Yasuo WIP | StickNodes]

Nice smode, and flasye. The part at 00:04:64 made a nice difference in the combat; a more detailed background or environment would have been great, though.

[The King Wonders]

Dementia